Thursday, November 17, 2011

pilot #4 critique

format/grammar: check punctuation, check spelling. Format good a little off on some sentences. Capitalize the characters name when first introducing them.


Characters: Each character has their own personality and i love that about a story.
Destiny seems like she loves Nathaniel.
Nathaniel loves Destiny and he regrets what he did but also he should've thought of his girlfriend first before doing anything else.


Conflict/ story: great conflict.. liked the ending. It leaves the reader wanting to know what is going to happen with the baby.

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