concept 31 #1 #2 #3

1. Three recent movies I've seen were ratatouille, resident evil apocalypse and star ship troopers.

2. It would change my life knowing that the people that were teasing will regret it. the student will have to live with what they did to him.

3. the inciting incident in the film i want to write will be that the girl is still going to school even though she is pregnant but the months have been really hard for her. Other girls call her names and tease her because she is pregnant.

concept 30 #1 #2 #3

1. "A" line for Kelly..wants to be popular at her school.
    "B" line for Kelly..might not be because of her geeky cousin.
    "A" line for mom..invites geeky cousin home.
    "B" line for mom..doesn't think Kelly needs to be popular.
    "A" line for cousin..spends the summer at Kelly's house.
    "B" line for cousin..might feel like a distraction to Kelly and her friends.

2. I would make the story a win/win by Kelly hanging out with her cousin instead of her friends.
I would make the story a no win/no win by Kelly's cousin deciding to leave because she found out that Kelly didn't want her to spend the summer at her house because of her friends.
I would make the no win/ win by Kelly's friends being friends with the cousin, and the friends noticed that Kelly didn't want the cousin to be there. So the friends didn't think Kelly was cool because she wanted to get rid of her cousin.

3. In the story I want to write the "A" objective will be that this girl ends up pregnant and her boyfriend
will stand up and take care of the baby but the parents don't approve of it.
The "B" objective will be that the boy and the girl will convince their parents to accept their relationship and the baby she is expecting.

concept 29 #2

INT. - JESSICA LIVING ROOM- NIGHT

INTERCUT PHONE SEQUENCE

Jessica just had a party while her parents were away on vacation. Her phone rings and its her mother.

JESSICA

Hello?

MOTHER

Hey honey how are you?

JESSICA

I'm fine. Really tired i just ran 1 hour non-stop.

Jessicas face when to a frown because she lied to her mother.

MOTHER

Wow really? That's good. Well i was calling you to let you know that your father and I are coming home a little early because their was an accident at the hotel we were staying at.

JESSICA

Wait what what?!?!

Jessica was panicking. She didn't know what to do. She had a complete mess from the party she had.

JESSICA

What time will you get home?

MOTHER

we'll be there in about 20 minutes.

Jessicas eyes were wide open.

JESSICA

um..um. ok then. i'll wait for you guys right here.

MOTHER

We better not see a mess in the house like last time ok??

JESSICA

everything is clean 

MOTHER 

ok then we'll be there in a few minutes.. Love you.

END INTERCUT PHONE SEQUENCE

 Jessica was cleaning the house a fast as she can from the living room to the kitchen to the bathrooms and the rooms.

concept 28 #2 or #3

On my last birthday I stayed home with my family. My aunt came and brought me cake and a gift card from Hollister as a present. My dad also gave me a big surprise. After he got out of work, he came home with 12 white and red roses and a birthday card for me. I thought it was beautiful.

Love Hexagon Critique

Format: check the int. and ext.

character: julie and taylor, weren't very realistic and original.

story/conflict: needs to be more unique. make the teen pregnancy story more different

Ground hog day reflection

Groundhog day was easier to understand than Memento because it was easier for me and it didn't have many flash forwards like Memento does. i like run lola run better than groundhog day because run lola run has a lot of endings that are interesting.

pilot #4 critique

format/grammar: check punctuation, check spelling. Format good a little off on some sentences. Capitalize the characters name when first introducing them.


Characters: Each character has their own personality and i love that about a story.
Destiny seems like she loves Nathaniel.
Nathaniel loves Destiny and he regrets what he did but also he should've thought of his girlfriend first before doing anything else.


Conflict/ story: great conflict.. liked the ending. It leaves the reader wanting to know what is going to happen with the baby.

pilot critique #3

-great format

- Couple mistakes in the punctuation, some question marks were there when they weren't needed.

- characters are very interesting and each character has a different personality.

-interesting conflict, very realistic

cheaters script

format: mostly everything was fine but needed grammar check and the spacing was a little off.


characters: Everyone likes everything about the football player John. Needed more characters.


conflict: needed more conflict, got boring after a while.

pilot # 1

Introduced all of the characters very.

Needed to improve on Grammar  and spelling.

About the character Jessica, she is a little pessimistic. 

Entertaining at the end. At the ending of the story it leaves us wanting to know whats going to happen.

reflection on Psycho

What is creative about the story structure is the music playing when something horrible is going to happen. The characters are very unique because each character has their own personality.

critique pilot #2

Really good format.

When introducing characters first put in caps.

There should've been more dialogue with chloe and jordan..

Great conflict very realistic.

Check punctuation.

Pilot script

INT. SCENE 1 HOUSE MORNING TIME

 get rid of the "scene 1" and put day or night not the time.

INT. house-morning- Day or night 

no caps on the action.