pilot #4 critique

format/grammar: check punctuation, check spelling. Format good a little off on some sentences. Capitalize the characters name when first introducing them.


Characters: Each character has their own personality and i love that about a story.
Destiny seems like she loves Nathaniel.
Nathaniel loves Destiny and he regrets what he did but also he should've thought of his girlfriend first before doing anything else.


Conflict/ story: great conflict.. liked the ending. It leaves the reader wanting to know what is going to happen with the baby.

pilot critique #3

-great format

- Couple mistakes in the punctuation, some question marks were there when they weren't needed.

- characters are very interesting and each character has a different personality.

-interesting conflict, very realistic

cheaters script

format: mostly everything was fine but needed grammar check and the spacing was a little off.


characters: Everyone likes everything about the football player John. Needed more characters.


conflict: needed more conflict, got boring after a while.

pilot # 1

Introduced all of the characters very.

Needed to improve on Grammar  and spelling.

About the character Jessica, she is a little pessimistic. 

Entertaining at the end. At the ending of the story it leaves us wanting to know whats going to happen.

reflection on Psycho

What is creative about the story structure is the music playing when something horrible is going to happen. The characters are very unique because each character has their own personality.

critique pilot #2

Really good format.

When introducing characters first put in caps.

There should've been more dialogue with chloe and jordan..

Great conflict very realistic.

Check punctuation.

Pilot script

INT. SCENE 1 HOUSE MORNING TIME

 get rid of the "scene 1" and put day or night not the time.

INT. house-morning- Day or night 

no caps on the action.